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This survey is about Barak Obama. His birth name is Barak Hussein Obama and he was born in Hawaii. His mother was (11) a white American (25) and his father was (11) a black Kenyan (25). His parents got divorced when he was 2 years (14) old. He attended Chicago law school and he also studied at Harvard University(25) .When he finished his education, he started teaching at Harvard University.(25) He also became Harvard University editor reviewer (23) and he was the first African American (25) in that position . Obama is the first black president of United-States. This report was (11) done (18) to find out how the first black president will bring about change for people (18). So the Canadian and the American people gave their reasons for this big change.

This survey was (11) sent to two different group of age (18):
The people from 18 to 29 years old (14) and the people from 30 years and older. So this survey’s questions were the fallowing: 1- If you had to voted (10) during the last United States elections, (23) would you have voted for Barack Obama or John McCain (22)?2- Do you think (18) that the first black president in this country will bring about change (23)?3-Barack Obama leads (11) his (18) campaign (22) by talking about change, hope and responsibility (22). Do you think he will respect what he promised to people? (23) Do you wish he would?4-Do you prefer to live with Obama’s politics (19, 8) or Harper’s politics? (23)5-Do you think that Obama will bring about peace for (18) USA and other countries? Would you like (18) the war would stop (11)? Explain your answer.The results were very interesting because older people used to think (11) that Obama was (11) not as important to younger people as he was (11) to older people. (23) For the first question, both groups (19, 14) answered Barak Obama.For the second (22) question, both group said that Barak (25) Obama means change (18, 11). The reason was (11) because (17) it (18) shows (10) that the society was (11) not racist and also because Obama is a new hope after years of obscurantism.For the third question, some people said that he would respect them and others said no, because he is not the only person who decides in the USA. (23) For the fifth question, the whole group of 30 years (17) and older said they would prefer Obama’s politics but 5 % of younger people said they would prefer (10) Harper’s (25, 22) politics.For the question six, (24) which was about bringing peace, some people said that they were (11) sure that he would (11) bring peace and some people said that they didn’t know.
The survey and the result show (10) that Barak Obama (25) will bring about a change for people. It shows that the majority of Americans (25) are not racist and they are very realistic.(22) Barak Obama talks about hope and responsibilities (22) in his speeches(22) .Even if he is not the only one who decides for United States politics, (23) he will have a big influence. Politics is not just about talking and it is also (21) about responsibilities (22). Barak Obama believes that United States (23) will take (22) the world but he did not want (14) (11) to make enemies (22).He wants (14) to make (18) a good relation (18) with other countries. He’s working (22) on world economics and he is also making changes inside his country (24). He is working on Medical Care (14) at beginning (22) of his post (23). Barak Obama was a good choice (23) because he’s a smart and educated person. We hope he does his best for United States (23).